Topic on Talk:Assault rifle
Jump to navigation
Jump to search
This page shows the changes between two versions of a post by Bullwinkle in the topic "Writing style" on Talk:Assault rifle.
You can see other versions of this post at its history page.
| Line 1: | Line 1: | ||
| − | The ranged weapon pages are full of useful information | + | The ranged weapon pages are full of useful information and are very well-written for the most part. But the writing style on all the ranged weapon introductory paragraphs is plodding and confusing to a casual reader. They do not offer an instant "Oh, I get it" for a first-time visitor. "Moderately-heavy moderately-slow, blah blah blah with an inverse burst ratio and a hint of ginger" is no way to start things off. It is plodding and confusing, requiring mental gymnastics to even understand. When someone glances at a wiki, the first sentence they see should give them a quick and easily understandable overview. The first sentence has to pop. I added such a sentence yesterday (without removing anything) and found it was immediately removed. OK. Have fun with your wiki. I thought this was a community project where multiple people could contribute. Guess not. Enforced mediocrity is where I part company. |
Oh, and if you say something has a "shorter delay" or a "slightly longer range," you might bother to mention compared to what. But what do I know about writing? | Oh, and if you say something has a "shorter delay" or a "slightly longer range," you might bother to mention compared to what. But what do I know about writing? | ||